I don't often know what's going to work and what's going to be too far-fetched.  Particularly when it's a matter of breaking grammatical rules to satisfy the rhyme or meter.  Is it an example of sloppiness, requiring a complete reworking of the idea, or is it an example of creative license, stretching the rules for comic effect?  Usually I just have to share it and see whether I get back positive comments or silence.  This one seems to have succeeded.

I feed my persnickety pumas
On mangosteens, plums, and satsumas.
If they happen to eat
Just one morsel of meat
Then they suffer revenge (Montezuma's).

Based on the suggestion: “satsuma”